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Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward student who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #schools #reward #students #show #results #student #improvements
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Currently, how to conduct an award between
students
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 who gain supreme
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 and others who acquire
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 during the term has drawn more attention. As far as I am concerned, giving the two different types of
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 encouraging awards simultaneously is vital. For those who hold the first view, academic achievement is the only criterion to measure whether
students
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 can win the prize. Most often they support schools to make everyone’s grades public and who catch the award will be judged on them. The study
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 represents how hard a student has worked during the school year, naturally,
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 the criteria. Admittedly, academic
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 is one of the important
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 of appraising awards, for others, it is equally significant to reward those who make huge
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. Different
students
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 will show various changes in the learning process at each stage, some of them come from behind with amazing perseverance and talent. Even if they do not get the best academic results,
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progress
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 and effort deserve recognition. If
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 group of people do not get the same reward, it will cause
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poor
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 to lose the motivation to learn and improve. In my opinion, on matter
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 with good academic
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 or
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 who have made great
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 should be valued and rewarded. Giving rewards only to
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 who do well in their studies will discourage
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 who make
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,
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 with good grades do not get the recognition they deserve, which will cause psychological imbalance. Take me
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, as the key period of personality development is in
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high school, I have experienced both dramatic
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 in academic
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 and maintaining good achievement, fortunately, my teacher did a good balance between the two parts so that I finished my studies with a positive attitude. Generally speaking, how to treat
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 with supreme achievement and obvious
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 is an important pedagogical topic, getting the balance right and giving appropriate rewards is crucial to managing and educating
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