Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not real needs of the society in which they are sold To what extend do you agree?

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high sale of famous user's
product
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products
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shows that all
due to
shows that
its
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all
due to
their publicity
their
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without their selling history
according to
the requirement of the
people
of
the
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society. The essay agrees with the above viewpoint and
discuss
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two main reason behind the high Selling rate
due to
advertisement. First of all,
today
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ads are very eye-catching and attention seeker as compared to the ads of
decade
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ago.
Due to
this
buyers get curious to obtain that
product
and want to use it without thinking about the quality of
product
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the product
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and whether they need that item or not.
For
example
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according to
the survey, most
a
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people
think that the motivation for buying something is
due to
its attractive publicity. So,
by
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apply
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showing the item very appealing to
consumer
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consumers
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enhances its chances of being purchased by the buyers.
On the other hand
,
usually
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the
product
sale is highest in the Areas where
people
are not highly educated like in rural areas. So these
people
go for it only if they are financially able to buy it without a reading caption being displayed there and
also
do not care about their own and their
family
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family's
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needs.
for instance
, a local electric
brand
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brand's
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annual selling report shows that most of its
product
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products
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were sold in far rural areas where there is high load shedding. So it indicates that what forced the local
people
to buy those items is surely
it's
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its
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good and charming media publicity there. In conclusion, it's normal practice
now a days
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nowadays
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that
people
are more keen to buy
product
having engaging
advertisement
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advertisements
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without thinking about their needs and do not bother to read the date
of
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on the
product
as they are either illiterate or impressed with the display of the particular item in the add.
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  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
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