The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicted the changes in
prices
of copper,
nickel
and zinc per month average in the year 2014.
Overall
, it was clear that both the three metals have fluctuated in
price
over the 12
months
,
while
nickel
has had the largest changes in
prices
. It was
also
noted that in the first 6 six
months
, the
prices
of medals were rising, but in the second half of the year, the
prices
were keep decreasing until the
last
two
months
, which was a little rise to above 0%. In the first half of 2014,
nickel
had the biggest changes in
price
, starting at 6% and downing to -3%, which declined by 9 percentage points,
while
copper was in the same steadily declining trend, decreasing by 3 percentages points, which was from 2% to -1%. Compared to the trend of Zinc at the same time, it slightly rosed to 3% for the second month and fell to -0.5% in the provided period. In the second half year, the average
price
of Copper,
Nickel
and Zinc were keep increasing from the lowest point in June. They kept at the same level of
price
for three
months
, which were between July and September, at 1%, -1% and 1.5%, respectively. After September, the medals had decreased slightly and
finally
got the
price
increased and gained a positive change in the
last
two
months
, which were at 0.8%,1% and 2%, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, nickel, price, months with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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