The diagram below shows a school now and the plan for the school in 2025.

The maps contrast the detailed layouts of a current and planned school building in 2025.

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, the main school area, sports building, football field and playground are expected to be unchanged,

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the school facilities

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as basketball and tennis court will be reconstructed in the place of the present-day playground.It is

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notable that there will be more area purposed for parking separately for staff and visitors. In 2025, the area of the playground is planned to be less wide in order to reconstruct nearby sports facilities(basketball and tennis courts). In the west corner, the canteen is more likely to be replaced by a science building,

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the canteen will have been rebuilt in the northwest by 2025.

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, new 10-space parking will be available along the main road in the south, and around the new roundabout, which will connect the major parking space(150 spaces) and the employees’ parking.

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The diagram below shows a school now and the plan for the school in 2025.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own answers.

Topic-New technology have changed the way children spend their free time .Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that the internet has positive effect , others think that It has negative trends .Discuss both views and give your opinion .

Employers should give their staff at least four weeks’ holiday a year to make employees better at their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?