The diagram below shows a school now and the plan for the school in 2025.

#school #plan

The maps contrast the detailed layouts of a current and planned school building in 2025.

Overall

, the main school area, sports building, football field and playground are expected to be unchanged,

whereas

the school facilities

such

as basketball and tennis court will be reconstructed in the place of the present-day playground.It is

also

notable that there will be more area purposed for parking separately for staff and visitors. In 2025, the area of the playground is planned to be less wide in order to reconstruct nearby sports facilities(basketball and tennis courts). In the west corner, the canteen is more likely to be replaced by a science building,

while

the canteen will have been rebuilt in the northwest by 2025.

Lastly

, new 10-space parking will be available along the main road in the south, and around the new roundabout, which will connect the major parking space(150 spaces) and the employees’ parking.

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