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The table and pie charts show the number of research students in Aaustralia universities in 2001 and 2010

The table and pie charts show the number of research students in Aaustralia universities in 2001 and 2010
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The given 2 pie charts and table are presented a comprehensive comparison of the
number
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 of
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student
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students
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were
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doing
a
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research
in
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Australia
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Australian
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 University and categorized into gender between 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
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researcher
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researchers
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 experienced a significant increase from 2001 to 2010.
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,
International
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the International
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 research
student
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number
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 had
consideralbly
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considerably
considerable
growth
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 during 9 years period. Upon observation, In 2001, the
number
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 of
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student
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students
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 from local and abroad who did
a
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research started from 33.657 and 5.192, respectively.
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, local
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researcher
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researchers
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 slightly went up
around
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by around
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 39.488 students in 2010
while
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 overseas
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student
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students
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 dramatically rose
roughly
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by roughly
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 around 3 times in
number
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 (14.593) in 2010. Turning to the
others
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 remaining data, in
term
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 of gender proportion, local
student
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researcher
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researchers
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 shared a
sama
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small
 percentage of
man
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men
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 and
woman
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women
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 around 43% in 2001.
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, In 2010, the
percentace
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percentage
 of boys and girls of local
student
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researcher
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researchers
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 declined to around 39% and 35% respectively. It can be seen that regarding the growth of
abroad
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researcher
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researchers
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also
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 provided the
increasing
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 of male (12%) and (15%) female
propotion
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proportion
 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, student, researcher with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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