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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The pie chart illustrates the
countries
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country's
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 average household expenses in the year
of
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1950 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are six
category
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categories
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 of household expenditures. Housing and Food were highly spent by the population.
To begin
 with, Housing expenses were 70
percentage
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per cent
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 during 1950
,
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 but had
fall
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fallen
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 in 2010 and
expenditure
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the expenditure
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 rate was 22%.
Moreover
,
the
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apply
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Food had an increased variation in 2010. The Health care expenses
was
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were
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 2.4 per cent in 1950 and
it
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they
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 managed to remain constant in 2010. Despite
this
, Education had a plummet variation in 2010 it got dropped by 1 per cent.
Furthermore
,
Transportaion
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Transportation
 had a rise of 15
percentage
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per cent
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of
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in
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 expenditure in 2010.
In addition
, the major
flathold
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flat hold
 expense was
other
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another
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expense
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expenses
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 which reached a peak of 20
percent
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per cent
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 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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