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The graph below shows how people buy music Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The given line graph illustrates the Proportion of how many types of music sales
according to
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 three different methods: Streams,downloads,and CPs
purchase
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. In general, the total music sales remained steady throughout the whole period.
Additionally
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, the figure for CDS Purchas was lower than that for those Downloads by the end of the Period. The streams saw a steady rise of 40% . The Streams method of Music Sales saw a steady rise, starting at 5 % in 2011 and gradually increasing to 40% in 2018,
then
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 became plateauing. The downloads began at 35% in 2011 and increased to 43% and felly decreased until the end Period remaining steady, with the purchase of the CPs following a similar general path.

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