the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton , and planned future development of the site.

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The two maps illustrate the present industrial area and future development plan of Norbitoncity.

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, in the clear from the plan; all the factory buildings will be replaced with new residential houses.

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, the future map will be adding new buildings and roads in the town. To according the plans, in the centre will be built a new line from the roundabout and turn worth to cross the river, and a branch lane in the west.

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; in the South-west beside the big roundabout will establish a shop and in the South make a small roundabout.

at the end

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. in the planned future development with the south-east construct many facilities

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as medical centre and playground, and school.

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the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton , and planned future development of the site.

Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent technological developments. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowledge or experience.

Governments investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement.