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The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions.

The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions.
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The provided table demonstrates the number of
viewers
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 for
films
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 per
million
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 in five
countries
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.
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 it is evident that India is reflected in the most sweeping viewing digits for
action
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, romance and
comedy
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films
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 for both the total
films
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 and total
countries
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. As can be seen,
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 India is ranked as the first country as per the figures in
action
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 at 8
million
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viewers
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, romance at 7.5
million
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viewers
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 and
comedy
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 at 6.5
million
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viewers
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, the second country after India in
action
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 and
comedy
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 movies is Irelan
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 records7.6
million
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viewers
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 for
action
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 and 5.5
million
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viewers
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 for
comedy
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films
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. In sharp contrast, Irelan advances all the
countries
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 in Horror movies at 6.4
million
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viewers
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,
in
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 the opposite Jaban
come
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 in the latest figures,
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 displays the smallest number of
viewers
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 2.2
million
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.
In addition
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, New Zealand and Japan are relatively as similar in
action
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, romance and
comedy
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number
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of
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the viewer, they are around 3.9, 4.5 and 7.2
million
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viewers
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. all figures indicate that the most popular
films
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 in the
countries
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 are
action
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movie
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movies
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words viewers, films, million, countries, action, comedy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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