The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The two graphs illustrate the stages of
production
of
cenment
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cement
and concrete for construction aims.
Overall
, it is clear the
production
of
cement
beginning
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begins
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with mixing
limstone
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limestone
and clay and
final
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the final
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stage
is
put
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putting
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cement
in
bages
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bags
.
On the other hand
, the
production
of concrete start with mixing
cement
with water and the final
stage
was
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the concerte
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concerte
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concrete
mixer. Regarding
production
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the production
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of
cement
, the first
stage
was
mix
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to mix
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limestone with clay and enter them
to
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into
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crusher
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a crusher
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in order
in
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to
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convert
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converting
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the
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apply
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them to powder.
The
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next
stage
, powder
enter
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enters
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mixer
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the mixer
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, and
pass
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passes
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through
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the rotatiog
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rotatiog
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rotating
rotation
heater in order to convert powder to grains.
Finally
,
grinder
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the grinder
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convert
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converts
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grians
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grains
grain
to
cement
, and after that
cement
put
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is put
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in bags. When it comes to
production
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the production
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of concrete, four elements
was
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were
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mix
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mixed
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with other. To illustrate, 15 % of
cement
with 10 % of water
mix
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mixed
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with 25 % sand and 50 % gravel and put the combination on
concrete
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a concrete
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mixer.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, cement, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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