The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The two graphs illustrate the stages of
production
of cenment
and concrete for construction aims.
Correct your spelling
cement
Overall
, it is clear the production
of cement
beginning
with mixing Wrong verb form
begins
limstone
and clay and Correct your spelling
limestone
final
Correct article usage
the final
stage
is put
Wrong verb form
putting
cement
in bages
. Correct your spelling
bags
On the other hand
, the production
of concrete start with mixing cement
with water and the final stage
was Correct article usage
the concerte
concerte
mixer.
Regarding Correct your spelling
concrete
production
of Add an article
the production
cement
, the first stage
was mix
limestone with clay and enter them Fix the infinitive
to mix
to
Change preposition
into
crusher
in order Correct article usage
a crusher
in
Change preposition
to
convert
Change the verb form
converting
the
them to powder. Remove the article
apply
The
next Change preposition
In the
stage
, powder enter
Change the verb form
enters
mixer
, and Correct article usage
the mixer
pass
through Correct subject-verb agreement
passes
Correct article usage
the rotatiog
rotatiog
heater in order to convert powder to grains. Correct your spelling
rotating
rotation
Finally
, grinder
Correct article usage
the grinder
convert
Change the verb form
converts
grians
to Correct your spelling
grains
grain
cement
, and after that cement
put
in bags.
When it comes to Add a missing verb
is put
production
of concrete, four elements Add an article
the production
was
Change the verb form
were
mix
with other. To illustrate, 15 % of Wrong verb form
mixed
cement
with 10 % of water mix
with 25 % sand and 50 % gravel and put the combination on Wrong verb form
mixed
concrete
mixer.Correct article usage
a concrete
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, cement, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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