Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In
this
modern society, many children
spend hours playing with their mobile devices
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toddlers
while
their parents busy
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or
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mind
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on
children
.
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with, this
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these
devices
can give children
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be givent
givent
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given
children
by their mothers. This
because
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is because
the
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an
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they are used to Add a comma
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the
smartphones whenever they cannot be calm when Correct article usage
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the
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food
This
can cause a habit for the children
when they're eating. They will throw tantrum
so the mother could give them the Fix the agreement mistake
tantrums
devices
and focus on the screen for a day long. In addition
, many
content Correct quantifier usage
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on
the
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apply
are
not yet suitable for Change the verb form
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the
young Correct article usage
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children
to be exposed to. They haven't know which is bad or which is good. Thus
this
create
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creates
a
bad mental health for them. They could easily be shown Remove the article
apply
to
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apply
a
content that Correct article usage
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are
not appropriate without their parent knowing they're seeing that things. Change the verb form
is
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will slowly develop a
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unpleasent
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unpleasant
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phase
However
, there also
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is also
giving
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on giving
children
gadgets. With a
proper Remove the article
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time
management and supervisions
from the parents, Fix the agreement mistake
supervision
this
will make the children
know better when they have to use the mobile phone as well as
how long they should stop using it. This
will create a sense of responsibility for the children
in the future to know how to have responsiblity
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responsibility
over
their phones.
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for
To sum up
, there are both positive and negative impact
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impacts
for
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on
the
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children
development if they're given mobile Change noun form
children's
devices
for a long time
. In
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postive
side, they could have better Correct your spelling
positive
time
management and have responsibility over
their Change preposition
for
time
. While
on the other hand
, they could get exposed to the
content Correct article usage
apply
that is
not suitable for their age, yet parents will have no control over their children
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