some children spend hours everyday on their smartphones. why is this the case? do you think this is a positive or a negative development ?

Digital technologies have made the young generations waste a long time of their life immersing

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that unreal world. All

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of games, movies, and activities can be done

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that small screen of them.

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can be either

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for parents that

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of their children playing outside or a poor

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for parents that does not know the harm of these gadget. The benefits of

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mobile are

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a lot more

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the drawbacks. Kids are able to discover new

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as learning interactively, attracting them to study individually

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early age,

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as learning new vocabulary.

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, parents can work and do house chores peacefully

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their child being distracted.

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, children can

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find new friends from

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they play.

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can enhance their social skills and friends

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so that they will not

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in making friends.

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the benefits are

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more than the drawbacks, the negative aspects make

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impact

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the

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phycology. These include

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problems and mental

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. Using cell

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for a long period of time might damage their

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the radiation

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exposed to them.

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, mental

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might

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from how the behaviour of their social connection in that virtual world.

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social

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may

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because of the bad treatment that they get from

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social media,

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example

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cyber bullying.

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, digital technologies indeed bring harm

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the minor age. The terrible aspect

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the advantages of these gadgets.

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,

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must really pay

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to what their kids do

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the internet.