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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 map illustrates the
city
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 hospital drive access in 2007 and 2010. The main difference between these two years is, we can see there are two roundabouts added in 2010. The other physical structures that have been added are
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bus
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a bus
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 station and
public
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a public
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car
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park
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. Before these developments in 2010, there were
bus
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 stops on both sides of
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road
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the road
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 and staff and
public
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a public
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car
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park
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 on the East of the hospital
road
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.
It is clear that
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 in 2010,
new
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a new
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 public
car
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park
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 has been
build
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built
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 in
east
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the east
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 of the
city
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 hospital
while
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,
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apply
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 the old
car
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park
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 has changed into
staff
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the staff
a staff
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car
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park
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. Looking at the map in more detail,
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bus
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a bus
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 station
constructed
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was constructed
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 on the west side of the hospital
road
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 with two entrances for roundabouts. It is
noticable
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noticeable
 that one roundabout
located
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is located
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 on the south of
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city
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the city
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 hospital with the entrance to the
bus
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 station, hospital
road
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 and ring
road
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,
whereas
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 the other roundabout
was
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is
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on
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in
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 the middle
on
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of
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 the
city
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road
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, bus, car, park, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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