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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 map illustrates the
city
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 of Brandfield.
City
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 planners are planning to build a new shopping mall for
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city
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 in two areas, S1 and S2.
Overall
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,
This
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 area was divided into east and west sides by a
railway
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 and both places S1 and S2 are located on the east side.
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, a golf course and park accounted for a large part of the west side. Next to the golf course and park, the
city
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centre
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 is located in the
centre
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 of the
city
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.
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, on the east side of
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 building, there is an industrial
estate
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. South of the industrial
estate
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, S2 is planned to build a new mall across the
railway
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.
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, north of the
city
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centre
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, a housing
estate
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 is located across a
railway
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, and between the housing
estate
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 and the
railway
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, there is S1, where it is planned to build a new mall.
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, there is a river from the north of S1 to the south of the golf course and a park across the
city
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centre
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, railway, centre, estate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city planners
  • proposed
  • shopping mall
  • the main features
  • comparisons
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • recommendation
  • site selection
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