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More students go to a different country for their higher studies. Do you think the benefits outweigh the problems?

#students #country #studies
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 in a different country is a dream for many
students
 because of many reasons but at the same
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 it brings
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 challenges and problems as well.
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 we will discuss both scenarios. As per the recent data,
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a huge
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 number of
students
 are either moving to different countries for their higher studies or planning to go. There are
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 of reasons for the same.
For example
 quality education, craze to explore other countries and meet new people.
Moreover
, there are many other factors as well like job
opportunity
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 and
better
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a better
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 lifestyle. Social media is another factor to influence
yound
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young
 minds and they get attracted towards other countries.
Whereas
, going abroad for studies brings many hurdles and problems to the
students
 which are not ignorable. Sometimes some
students
 get trapped
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 drugs
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some
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 cases where
students
 could not handle the pressure and got heart attack.
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Though
such
 cases are rare and only a few in
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. In conclusion, we can say that
studing
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studying
 abroad is quite a fruitful option and carries
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plenty
 of opportunities only if you are able to take care of yourself and parents can keep track of their
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. And If you are strong enough to handle the pressure
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and
 manage every situation of life.
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