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Task 1: The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Task 1: The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph displays the changes in the proportion of the
population
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 which were living in cities from four countries within the Asia continent between the years 1970 to 2020 and
also
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 provides future predictions for the next twenty years.
Overall
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, All the countries' populations substantially grew in numbers throughout the
period
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.
However
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, Malaysia became the highest populated country in percentage
whereas
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, the least populated country which rose in percentage was
Thailand
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. At the beginning of the
period
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, Malaysia and the Philippines were almost at the same percentage in
population
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 but in 1990, these two countries started to show some significant changes. Malaysia kept on surging till 2040 as per the prediction at a peak of around 85%
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 the Philippines depleted by 10% in the year 2010 and from 2020 it gradually jumped to approximately 55% of the
population
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 by the end of the
period
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.
Furthermore
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,
Thailand
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 and Indonesia were in the range of below 20% in 1970
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, In the year 2000, Indonesia crossed
Thailand
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 in
population
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 and in the next ten years, it even crossed the Philippines as well becoming the second most populated country in Asia continent by the year 2020 and
also
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according to
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 the future prediction. Apart from that,
Thailand
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population
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 steadily expanded over the
period
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 and became the least contributor to
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population
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the population
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 in Asia continent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, period, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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