The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.
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The four pie charts depict the percentage of electricity generation in two different countries from all types and
renewables
in 2009.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the highest proportion in
France
was nuclear and
renewables
including hydroelectric made up the highest trend
while
, in
Germany
, these types were lower. It is obviously seen that in 2009, the usage of nuclear was distinguished noticeably that consisted of 23% in
Germany
while
it was 76% in
France
.
In contrast
, conventional thermal made up 59% of German, it showed a downward trend of 10.3% in
France
.
According to
the
Renewables
, they differentiated only 1% as they consisted of 17.4% and 18.7% respectively in
Germany
and
France
. Regarding
renewables
which included three different types of electricity, Hydroelectric Power accounted for the largest proportion 80.5% in
France
.
Nevertheless
,
this
figure was 17.7% in
Germany
. Biomass and wind energy demonstrated larger proportions 39.3% and 36.9% in
Germany
while
these figures were the lowest points in
France
8.1% and 10.5% in
France
.
Besides
that in two countries, solar energy consisted of 6,1% and 0.9% in 2009.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words renewables, france, germany with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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