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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Access to isolated natural habitats like the South
Pole
have
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 now become possible for tourists and scientists because of the advancements made in the transportation industry. Some people may say that
this
 has enabled the researchers to discover more natural resources
whereas
 some may argue that
due to
 increased human activity, it has
lead
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 to the pollution of the natural habitats. Places like the South
pole
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Pole
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 have not been researched much because of the travel and environmental limitations,
however
 with advanced technologies in place today we might be
at
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 the verge of making breakthrough discoveries for natural resources that can be highly beneficial to the survival of the human race. For
exmaple
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, it was recently discovered that the south
pole
consist
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 of several natural resources lying deep within the glaciers which need
further
 study. The infrastructure
that is
 being developed to
accomodate
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accommodate
 visitors in
such
 locations
like
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as
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 the construction of hotels, roads, hospitals, ports and airports has led to the destruction of the
the
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natural habitats for the arctic animals. Over the years, with increased human activity in the south
pole
,
increase
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 in
melting
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the melting
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 of glaciers and migration of the arctic animals to other regions has been observed, as human
existance
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existence
 has made it difficult for them to survive.
This
 is one of the biggest disadvantages of
such
 development.
To sum up
, there is a huge potential
of
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 scientific discoveries that can prove to be highly beneficial to the human race, but
on the contrary
, allowing tourism in these untouched locations can have significant effects on the natural ecosystem of the south
pole
.
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