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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the
number
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 of
people
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 who visited a particular Caribbean
island
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 in a seven-year
period
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, between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of tourists attracted to
this
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 certain
island
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 increased.
While
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 the
number
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 of visitors who preferred to stay on cruise ships rose, the
number
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 of ones who stayed on the
island
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 fell during the
period
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 in question. In 2019, the
island
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 was visited by one
million
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people
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, and most of them decided to stay on the
island
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, well above 500,000. In the first half of the
period
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 in question, the
number
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 of
people
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 who chose to spend their residency on the
island
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 improved by approximately one
million
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. At the same time, the
number
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 of tourists who liked to stay on cruises ranged from almost 250,000 to half a
million
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. In the second half of the
period
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 in question, the popularity of cruise accommodation increased significantly, and by 2016 it had surpassed the figure for residency on the
island
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, and the
number
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 reached 2
million
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 visitors. In 2017, the
number
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 of
people
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 who still preferred to stay on the
island
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 reached 1.5
million
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. Looking at the total
number
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 of tourists, it witnessed a steady rise until 2015, when it reached more than 2.5
million
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people
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. Despite remaining constant for one year,
then
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 the figure jumped to 3.5
million
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 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, island, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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