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If people go to live in another country, they should follow the local customs and traditions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In my opinion,
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 I agree that
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 who move to other countries can maintain their original living way, I still agree that integrating with
locals
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 is crucial. On the one hand, it is significant to keep your own
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 no matter where you go. Following
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’s original
culture
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 would be easier for anyone because
people
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 do not have to change themselves. Since moving to new places is very stressful,
people
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 can feel at ease if they live parallel to what they did in their hometown.
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,creativity and inspiration can be brought to new places by those
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 who insist on their own traditions. Sometimes , it can activate
locals
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 and become new see sightings. Chinatowns,
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, are unique neighbourhoods around the world. Those Chinese emigrated to other countries without bending with
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. Those special regions become popular and attract
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 and tourists alike.
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, obeying
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 rules and local customs is beneficial for immigrants. It is safer to follow the local rules when
people
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 move to a new place.
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, some gestures may have good symbols in one
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 but mean assault in another
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.
People
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 who are not familiar with local traditions might do something annoying
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locals
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 without knowing what had happened.
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,
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locally would more likely accept the immigrants who respect local
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 and integrate with
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.
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, if
people
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 want to find jobs or develop their own business in the new place, trying to fit into the local would be an intelligent idea. In conclusion,
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 keeping
people
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’s own traditions in other countries can bring some advantages, it is better to know the customs and follow the local rules.
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