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In order to improve the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticise their teachers, but other think it will result in loss of respect and discipline in classroom. What your opinion ?

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Some believe
education
 with better
quality
 makes the
teachers
 should be evaluated and criticized by
students
 and others argue that steps make the
teachers
 lose their respect, and caused children to indiscipline. In my opinion, the parameters of good
education
quality
 are not supposed criticised directly by the
students
.
This
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this
 issue in detail below. On the one hand,
teachers
' roles in the class
is
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 essential to developing their
students
 to be more knowledgeable. The achievement of
teachers
 who make their
students
 clever, so it is indicated that the
quality
 of
education
 is in high
quality
 and if there are some things that need to be fixed I believe there are other
ways
 to correct the learning method of
teachers
. To exemplify, the teacher who teaches some
subject
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 and on the final exam resulted that many
students
 are not achieved the score.
Therefore
, the involvement of the principal is important to review the result of children's exams and the principal should evaluate the
ways
teachers
 teach.
On the other hand
, I believe to exceed the critical skills of adolescents is to involve them in daily problems projects. the projects require the adolescents to research the main problems and the solutions that need to be implemented in the given problems. To illustrate, the
teachers
 give them a project regarding the "Homeless" issue that happens in their city, and the
teachers
 ask them to make a report which consists of the solution to make the number of homeless decrease in the community.
As a result
,
students
 who frequently involve in some projects that need their thought will make their critical ability improve, so the
teachers
' dignity and wisdom remain as they should be.
To sum up
, there are some arguments that state
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students
 should correct their
teachers
'
ways
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 teaching, and others consider it will reduce their respect
of
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 the
teachers
. I believe there are many
ways
 to enhance the critical thinking of
students
 which I have explained above, and I consider it makes the
quality
 of
education
 better.
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