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the plans show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The plans depict the design of a university’s sports
centre
 now and after redesigning
project
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the project
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. At
first,
I see a big
pool
 in the
centre
 which is surrounded by
gym
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the gym
a gym
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in
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on
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 the north
side
,
reception
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a reception
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 area at the bottom and both
seating
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the seating
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area
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areas
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 and changing room
in
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on
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 the right and left
side
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sides
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 of the
pool
 respectively. There are
also
 two outdoor courts which
is
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are
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 out of the main
centre
. The future plan shows a huge development in
this
centre
.
In addition
,
gym
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the gym
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 will be expanded but changing room, seating area,
pool
 and reception will be the same.
Although
, the outdoor courts will be replaced by a big leisure
pool
 and a
sport
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sports
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 hall which is
in
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on
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 the east
side
 of
a
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the
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 map.
Furthermore
, two dance studios will be constructed exactly next to the
sport
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sports
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 hall.
Also
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,Also
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 they will have two more changing rooms
in
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on
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the
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apply
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both
side
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sides
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 of the entrance.
Moreover
, there will be a
one
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apply
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café
in
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on
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 the right
side
 of the entrance and a sport shop on the other
side
 of it.
Overall
, not only they will have their past facilities, but
also
 they will build several areas in order to use that land more beneficial.
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