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In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now to research other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the
future
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 it may be important for us to live on alternative
planets
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.
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, some individuals think that we should spend money now to research other
planets
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, namely Mars, and Moon. I completely agree with
this
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 statement because
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earth
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the earth
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face
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faces
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 environmental issues, and
dramatically
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 growth of populations.
To begin
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 with, I totally support spending money on
space
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 programs. The primary reason why I believe that governments should support
space
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 projects is in
future
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the future
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 living on
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earth
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Earth
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 will become impossible . To demonstrate, our planet
face
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faces
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 environmental
crisis
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crises
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 namely, pollution, global warming, and climate change , which
mean
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these environmental problems have
a
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negative impacts on
people
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 and
animals
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animals'
animal's
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health .
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, if the government spend money on
space
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 programs perhaps we find other plants we can live on
it
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apply
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without
environmenal
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environmental
 issues.
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,
space
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 research can create
thousand
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thousands
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 of jobs for people.
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, many employees on NASA as engineers,
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and astornuants
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astornuants
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astronauts
, which
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this
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apply
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can mitigate poverty and improve
living
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the living
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 standards of people.
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,
dramatic
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the dramatic
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 growth of
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earth
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Earth
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 inhabitants is another reason why I believe funding
space
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 projects is extremely significant. To illustrate, in
future
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the future
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scientist
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scientists
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 expect
shortage
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a shortage
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 of water and food on the
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earth
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Earth
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, which
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this
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apply
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can pose a threat
of
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live
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life
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 on the
earth
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.
Consequently
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, if the government funding
space
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 research
in
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on
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 other
planets
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 namely, Mars, and Moon maybe we find
a a
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apply
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new resources
of
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for
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 food and water, which
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this
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apply
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can contribute to
meet
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demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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dramatical
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 increase
of
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in
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 populations on
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earth
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Earth
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.
To sum up
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, I strongly support
space
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 projects
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due to
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because
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it
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they
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 help us to find alternative
planets
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to
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for
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 a better
live
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life
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 without environmental issues, and maybe we can find
a new sources
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new sources
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 of food and water on
others
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other
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planets
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.

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