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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is certainly true that
cars
 will be without drivers in the future. The
people
 would be passengers rather than drivers. It is my belief that the positive effects of
this
 trend could offset its disadvantages.
One
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 the
one
 hand, there are several advantages points of
vehicals
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vehicles
 of
driverless
. The first
one
 is that
people
 can focus on their activities as opposed to driving.
For example
, studying, reading books, call phones would be easier. Another positive effect is that some companies do not have to hire a driver for an
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 or transport.
Thus
, it can definitely save them a lot of income.
Moreover
, many
people
, from the elderly to students can drive It means that
,
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 they do not need to obtain
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a drive
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drive
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 license.
Additionally
, now, accidents occur because
people
 do not comply with traffic laws.
However
,
driverless
cars
 are less likely to violate traffic laws and regulations.
On the other hand
, there are many reasons why I think it's a drawback.
One
 of the disadvantages is that if a machine is destroyed,
cars
 would be extremely out of control.
As a result
, some unpredictable events can occur. In fact, these days, many car accidents are difficult for
people
 to control. The second reason is that a number of
people
 will lose their jobs,
such
 as taxi, bus and truck drivers.
Hence
, the unemployment rate could rise.
In addition
,
people
 who have driven for a long time can feel anxious and can not be trusted easily. Another negative aspect can be that
driverless
cars
 are difficult to purchase because of their high annual maintenance and high repair costs. In conclusion, it seems to me that
driverless
 car has brought us more benefits than negatives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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