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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing, and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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In recent times we have come across many
people
 who have been dealing with
body
weight
-related issues. The average
weight
 of
people
 in many countries is increasing and
this
 does not look good in the long run.
To begin
 with,
people
 are less concerned about their health and well-being. They have career goals and ambitions but lack the will to take care of their own
body
.
People
 are more focused on getting better jobs and earning more money. They have no time for working on their fitness.
For example
,
people
 in America have long working hours.
This
 causes them to have very less free time to work on themselves. Another reason for the decline in health and fitness is the cost and availability of
food
. The price of
food
 is increasing rapidly. A person with less access to quality
food
 products will tend to consume easily available fast
food
 which is cheap but not healthy. These fast foods do not contain the nutritional requirement a human
body
 requires.
This
 causes unnecessary fats to be accumulated in the
body
 leading to an increase in
weight
. To prevent the rapidly increasing
weight
 issues around the globe,
people
 must be made aware of the benefits of having a healthy and fit
body
. The government can
also
 help in providing better quality
food
 to its
people
. Fresh vegetables and other
food
 items must be made readily available for
people
 to buy.
However
, the government cannot restrict
people
 of what they can eat and cannot. So it boils down to an individual having proper nutrition in the daily diet and spending some time doing exercises. Even if a person spends a minimum of 45 minutes a day doing any sort of exercise is going to benefit them.
To conclude
, the increasing
weight
 of
people
 and lack of fitness has raised quite a lot of issues including the health of an individual.
People
 must be aware of the consequences of not having a proper diet plan.
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