The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram represents the way in which the
aluminium
cans
are recycled.Overall
, there are seven stages in the whole aluminium
bottle recycling process, beginning with the throwing away of used cans
in some specific bins and ending with the reusing of the metal in factories.
To begin
, the can need to be taken by special collection trucks instead
of normal ones.Then
the cans
are collected and taken to a factory which is used to first,
cleaned and then
sorted.Next,
they are shredded and crushed in a special machine.
In the subsequent phase, the metal goes through a heating and melting process at a high enough temperature. Afterwards, it is rolled out flat to a thickness of between 2.55 mm and 6mm.The aluminium
is now ready to be recycled into a new packing, as well as
drink containers. Finally
, the new cans
are delivered to a soft drink factory where they are filled. In the UK, 74 per cent of all aluminium
cans
that are used are recycled.Submitted by shokri.hananeh on
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