The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram represents the way in which the
aluminium
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cans
are recycled.Use synonyms
Overall
, there are seven stages in the whole Linking Words
aluminium
bottle recycling process, beginning with the throwing away of used Use synonyms
cans
in some specific bins and ending with the reusing of the metal in factories.
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To begin
, the can need to be taken by special collection trucks Linking Words
instead
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Then
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cans
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first,
cleaned and Linking Words
then
sorted.Linking Words
Next,
they are shredded and crushed in a special machine.
In the subsequent phase, the metal goes through a heating and melting process at a high enough temperature. Afterwards, it is rolled out flat to a thickness of between 2.55 mm and 6mm.The Linking Words
aluminium
is now ready to be recycled into a new packing, Use synonyms
as well as
drink containers. Linking Words
Finally
, the new Linking Words
cans
are delivered to a soft drink factory where they are filled. In the UK, 74 per cent of all Use synonyms
aluminium
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cans
that are used are recycled.Use synonyms
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