The diagrams below show one way in which sand dunes' are formed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show one way in which sand dunes' are formed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male

comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below displays the process of manufacturing instant
noodles
.
Overall
, the process consists of eight steps. It starts when the flour is stored in silos, and ends when manufactured instant
noodles
are labelled and sealed. First of all, the stored flour in silos is put in a container and brought to the manufactory.
Then
, some water and oil are added and they are mixed with the flour. The mixture
then
moves under a few rollers, which are used for turning the mixture into dough sheets. When the dough sheets are shaped, they will enter a machine which reshapes them into dough strips.
Subsequently
, the strips will shape
noodles
discs, and
that is
when they are considered to be ready to move forward and be cooked and dried. After cooking and drying the
noodles
discs, they are placed in cups.
Following
this
, vegetables and spices are added to the cups, and
this
is when they are prepared for labelling and sealing part.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.

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