The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.
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number
of shopping businesses that had been closed or had been opened in the particular land from 2011 to 2018.
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, with the exception of some fluctuations that these two figures experienced throughout Linking Words
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time frame, both of them had a downward Linking Words
trend
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figure started at about 6500 and Linking Words
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decreased to 6000 after one Linking Words
year
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of closed stores slightly increased to more than 7000 in 2013. During the 2 next Use synonyms
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amount plummeted down to less than 1000 in 2015. Between 2015 and 2016 Linking Words
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further
5000 and Linking Words
then
until the Linking Words
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year
it remained almost unchanged at 5000.
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period of time, Linking Words
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figure started at more than 8000 of novel stores in the first Linking Words
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to 4000. Between 2012 and 2014 it experienced a growing Correct your spelling
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trend
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trend
again declined to 4000. Use synonyms
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figure stood at around 4000 from 2015 to 2017 and Linking Words
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,finally
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amount reduced from 4000 to 3000.Linking Words
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