The chart below shows the result of survey of patient who stayed in three different wards of a hospitals. It shows what percentage of the patients replied "very good" aout various aspects of their hospital ecperience.

The chart below shows the result of survey of patient who stayed in three different wards of a hospitals. It shows what percentage of the patients replied "very good" aout various aspects of their hospital ecperience.
Overall
, the bar chart illustrates the demographic figures of
patient
views and reactions
according to
the hospital's
ward
facility, which is in proportion to three different wards.
Firstly
, the hospital staff in a holly
ward
was rated with very good replies by patients in a proportion of nearly 90%. Where is
maple
ward
Was rated lowest staff satisfaction at above 50% followed by nearly 70% in
oak
ward
.
However
, waiting time was quite disappointing in
Maple
and
Oak
wards with
patient
reactions of between 60 to 50% and an average in Holly
ward
approx. at 74%.
On the other hand
,
patient
in each of these Wards was suppressing happiness with the quality of treatment at the highest in a holy
ward
at 90%, 70% in the
maple
ward
and 10% lower than the holly
ward
in the
oak
ward
. but aftercare of treatment was reacted and averaged at 50% in
Maple
ward
and 70% quite nice in
Oak
ward
.
Although
patient
reaction in Holly
ward
in each of these categories was significantly high in comparison to others
lastly
at almost 90% of happy patients in aftercare treatment.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words patient, ward, maple, oak with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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