Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of the other parts in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the number of

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and

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galleries is dramatically increasing throughout the world. Some of them are supported by either the government or private investors. The understandable result of

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,

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some of them can focus on just their own

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masterpieces, others show a general piece of

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. Some people believe that

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and

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galleries should show the history and

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of their own country more than others. I totally disagree with

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idea and would like to express my thoughts. First of all, showing exhibition in

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and

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galleries create a chance to make money from

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visitors who live in foreign countries.

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, today Van Gogh's reputation

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spreads over oceans, and some of his oil paintings are shown around the world by different

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.

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exhibition helps to hit the number of visitors and to spread out

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culture

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anywhere via the visitors' minds and vivid memories.

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, a country which wants to promote its national

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could use the

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and national artists for

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occasion.

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, tourism plays a crucial role in countries developing these days.

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, in the summertime, most people travel to the Mediterranean countries because of the natural picturesque beauties,

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as the habitat, sea etc. Meanwhile, most tourists would like to see a museum which has significant importance in their own

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. It is possible to say that, a Turkish person who visits Greece could access a specific collection of bringing its country. For ages, the

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collection

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around the world. Because of

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, having and showing a foreign collection has critical importance to be an attractive centre. So,

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, expressing either local artists' or foreign famous artists' collections

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one of the most important parts

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income from tourism. The government ought to

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other nations' authorities to expand the arts' impact and fame.