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The pictures show the process of making cherry jam. Describe the process.

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The above illustrations demonstrate how to manufacture cherry jam. The production of it involves nine main stages, from shaking the trees to collecting fruits and transporting them to the manufacturing plant to sticking labels on the jars.
First,
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the trees are shaken to get the ripe cherries, and
then
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 the gathering cherries with their leaves and stems are carried to the factory for preparation by truck. In the processing plant, the leaves and stems are removed. After that, they are washed by water.
Next,
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fruits pass through an apparatus which has several metal spikes to take out the stone in the middle of them. In
this
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 stage, the cherries are cooked and extra ingredients
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 as lemon juice, sugar and pectin are added to make the flavour better. When the confection is ready, it is checked by the quality control unit, if it can pass the test, it's put into a jar and
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, the labels are stuck on the jar.
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