The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australias share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The Bar and line charts
illustrestes
the Japanese people Correct your spelling
illustrate
are
travelling in different countries from 1985 to 1995 with their contribution Unnecessary verb
apply
in
Change preposition
to
Australian
travel market.
Add an article
the Australian
Overall
, number of the Japanese people travelling to
abroad Change preposition
apply
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
increasing
trend Correct article usage
an increasing
except
a few months when data shows quite steady. Their Add the preposition
forexcept
contibution
Correct your spelling
contribution
in
travelling in Australia is Change preposition
to
also
increased by year or year whereas
sharp declined
in Replace the word
decline
couple
of years.
Change the article
a couple
To begin
with, the total number of people travelled
from Japan was very low in 1985, with above 4 Wrong verb form
travelling
million
, however
, it has been increased gradually till 1990 and reached around 10.5 million
. Furthermore
, there was marginal declined in 1991 but again increased in 1992 but no
much movement till 1993. Correct your spelling
not
In contrast
, sharp rose in 1994 and 1995, with, around 14 million
and 15.75 million
, respectively.
On the other hand
, their contribution in
Australia was on an uptrend till 1988 and Change preposition
to
sharp
fall Correct article usage
a sharp
found
in 1989 but continue with the same upward trend till 1993. Add a missing verb
was found
However
, the number has come down drastically in 1994.Submitted by kintans54 on
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