The bar graph shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar graph shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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graph compares the amount of electricity production and consumption in 2014 among ten countries. It is noticeable that the rate of producing and
consuming
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of electricity showed the same pattern in all
top
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ten nations except Germany.
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, manufacturing kWh was higher than using kWh in nine countries in that year.
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However
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the
power
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usage in Germany was over than the energy creation. As can be seen from the graph China had the maximum amount of electricity
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Korea Rep had the minimum in 2014 both in manufacturing and
consuming
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.
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,
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states
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had the second large value of
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power
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,
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France and Brazil showed roughly
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in
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amount. India was the top fifth country in
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chart and the value difference between
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creation and usage was around 172.2 in 2014.
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, China and
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states
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had been taken
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huge part of
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power
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the power
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supply in 2014 than the other regions in the world.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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