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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking repoinsibility. What are your opinions on this?

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It is true that
children
 are increasingly participating in paid
work
 lately,
this
 phenomenon can be seen in many nations.
However
, certain groups of people are concerned that
this
 is a negative
behavior
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, it seems to me that
children
 can benefit from
work
 experiences, and learn more valuable lessons than general education. There are some points that why allowing
children
 to
work
 is beneficial.
First,
children
 will be able to notice the value of the currency. It is undeniable that a lot of teens have no idea about monetary value. So
therefore
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, they can learn
this
 from earning money by themselves, which is an effective and straightforward way. By doing
this
, they are not only earning money and experiencing society, but they can
also
 express their energy and be more concentrated on the school works. Another point is that even though allowing teenagers to
work
 at restaurants or
such
 organizations can be dangerous, it is a great opportunity to teach them
reponsibility
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responsibility
.
For example
, if an employee delivers the wrong food to a customer, he must pay for it, and there is no way for an employee to escape
this
 responsibility in a company.
This
 is a meaningful lesson for
children
 because schools are not able to teach
such
 abstract knowledge, and it is beneficial to learn
this
 knowledge from an early age. In conclusion, participating in paid
works
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work
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 are a valuable lecture for
children
 as they absorb monetary knowledge and
also
 learn how to take responsibility). Incidentally, working and studying simultaneously is a meaningful experience in the
students’
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 lifetime.
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