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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays comfort
food
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 plays a big role in
people
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's
food
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 choices and it kind of takes the traditional
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's position and becomes more common as a selection for eating habits. And
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 it seems that the ordinary way of cooking has changed since
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 type of nourishment shows up. By the way, I want to discuss both sides of opinions. To be honest, I like foods that are easy to cook and have fast methods to be ready. So I assume that I agree about
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 state. As the world improves fast, different kinds of jobs come up and
people
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 become busier,
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 they don't have much
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 to concentrate on their meals and they evaluate it not that much important to waste their
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.
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 opinion draws their attention to foods that take less
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 to be prepared and I have to confess that it has a reasonable taste to make them convinced to pay for it every
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.
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 way of feeding gradually disappears the ability to cook because it comes off as unnecessary. So by the
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 the old techniques of
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 preparation become less popular and are forgotten. In another view,convenience
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 has colourful and eye-catching packaging that makes young
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 and children enthusiastic,
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 they prefer to eat it except for the
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that is
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 readied at home. But we can not mean that comfort
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 or even fast
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 occupies every
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 table in the entire world because there are still elders who can not be satisfied with
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 artifactual diet and
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 who believe that it does not have any nutrition to be healthy, so they avoid it. In my belief,
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 who try to live healthier not only prevent
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food
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 but
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 are big anti-fans. They believe that nutriment has to be fresh and that all the preservatives used in it devastate the benefit of each ingredient.
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, convenience
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 is just like an addiction that the community can't get rid of and find its spot in our lives.
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 it still, has its haters and
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 who aim hard to keep traditional's
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 and old recipes for real foods, alive.
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