The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The maps illustrate the changing of Norbiton
town
from
factory
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a factory
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area
to
developed
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a developed
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residential
area
plan in the future.
Overall
,
currently
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the
town
of
Norniton
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Norton
is located with many factories which are beside the road.
On the other hand
, in the future, the industrial
area
will be replaced by the expanded residential
area
.
In
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the
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present,
the
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Norbiton
town
is
fulled
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with
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industrialization,
also
all of them are just next to the main road. The farming
area
that is
on the north is divided from the factories site by the river.
Moreover
, there is a single roundabout and two main roads that are branched out.
While
in the future of Norbiton
town
, the housing
area
such
as houses, shops, playground, school and medical centre will be constructed next to two roundabouts and four main roads.
However
, the houses and agriculture
area
on the other side
that is
segregated by the river will be connected by the bridge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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