The table below gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets.

The table below gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets.
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The table compares the percentages of
carbohydrates
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,
protein
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, and fat in three types of average
diet
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, healthy
diet
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, and healthy
diet
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for
sport
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. From the figures, it can be inferred that the highest distribution belongs to
carbohydrates
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.
Also
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,
protein
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and fat take up the second and third proportions of three different diets, respectively.
Furthermore
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, it is noticeable that the percentages of
carbohydrates
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and
protein
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are equal. In a healthy
diet
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,
carbohydrates
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experience half of a healthy
diet
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.
While
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this
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figure increases by 10% in a healthy
diet
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for
sport
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and decreases exactly
this
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number in an average
diet
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.
Also
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, the average and healthy
diet
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contain equal distribution, about 20% which is 5% higher than for
sport
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people. the proportion of
protein
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in a healthy
diet
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is just under one-
third,
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and the average
diet
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constitutes exactly two-fifths.
In contrast
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, individuals who do the
sport
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consume the lowest amount of
protein
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which is about 25%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrates, protein, diet, sport with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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