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The first chart bellows shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use

The first chart bellows shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use
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The pie charts above illustrate how
energy
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 is utilized in an average
Australian
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 household and the
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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 which result from
this
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energy
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use
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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energy
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use
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 for different needs and appliances in
Australian
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 households releases different amounts of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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.
In addition
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,
Australian
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 people used the most
energy
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 for heating, including general heating and water heating,
however
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, the
gas
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 sent out by these uses that do not seem to be dominant. The
energy
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 used for heating saw the highest proportion, which accounts for more than 40%. Water heating is the second need, and its
energy
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use
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 consists of nearly a third. Meanwhile, the
energy
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 used for refrigeration, cooling, lighting and other appliances just only makes up over a quarter of the total
use
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 in
Australian
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 households. The amount of
gas
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emissions
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 from using
energy
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 for water heating accounts for the highest percentage, at 32% in total. Despite the highest need for
energy
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 for heating, the
greenhouse
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gas
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 released from
this
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use
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 only comprises 15%.
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A similar
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 proportion can be witnessed in the
gas
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 sent out from refrigeration, at 14%. Cooling, lighting and other appliances create roughly a third of total
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, australian, greenhouse, gas, emissions, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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