The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
usage
of
technologies
by
the
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US households from 1995 to 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
all
technologies
use
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by
residentals
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residents
residential
increased
thoughout
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throughout
the
period
, despite fluctuations. Only washing
machine
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machines
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accounts
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for the highest ratio between 1995 and 1999. All the lines of the graph have different starting
point
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points
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in 1995. Over the
period
, the
usage
of washing
machine
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machines
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and computer increased steadily. There was 60% to 80% of washing machine
usage
, which was the most
use
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of
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technologies
by
residentals
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residents
in the US.
Likewise
, the percentage of
housholds
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households
used
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that used
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computer
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a computer
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was
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similarly
increased from 40% to 70%. The
period
from 1995 to 1999 saw a
significantly
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change in phone
uses
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use
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by
residental
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residents
in the US, from below 20% up to almost 80%. In the 1995-1999
period
, there
were
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a minor fluctuation in
Internet
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the Internet
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and DVD player index. The
usage
of the Internet by households hit a low of 10% in 1995 which was the lowest starting point beyond other
technologies
.
DVD
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player uses in the US dropped steadily from 25% to 15% between 1995 and 1996 but
then
it rose constantly to 40% in 1999.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, technologies, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Households
  • Technology adoption
  • Growth rate
  • Decline rate
  • Milestones
  • Obsolete
  • Societal factors
  • Economic conditions
  • Advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Market saturation
  • Trend analysis
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