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the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories

the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories
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The bar chart illustrates the average number of minutes in
billion
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of
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telephone calls in the UK divided into three types from 1995 until 2002.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the local
line
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 users
was
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 decreasing,
while
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 the others increased.
To begin
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 with, in 1995, the fixed
line
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place
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 the highest amount of time, with around 70
billion
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. It experienced a steady rise until it reached a peak at exactly 90
billion
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, and remain stable from 1998 to 1999.
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, it dropped by nearly 20
billion
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 to the same point as it began.
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,
in
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 the beginning of the trend, national and international
fixed
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fixed-line
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line
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 users
was
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 higher compared to mobiles, with just below 40
billion
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 and 5
billion
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 each. They climbed up gradually,
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 the biggest gap for
mobiles
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 conversations
were
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 in 2000, which has a twofold rise. From
this
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 point onwards those types kept rising until national and international fixed
line
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 conversation arrive at 60
billion
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, and
mobiles
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 conversation with 45
billion
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 minutes
coversations
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conversations
conversation
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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