the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories

the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories
The bar chart illustrates the average number of minutes in
billion
of
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telephone calls in the UK divided into three types from 1995 until 2002.
Overall
, it can be seen that the local
line
users
was
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decreasing,
while
the others increased.
To begin
with, in 1995, the fixed
line
place
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the highest amount of time, with around 70
billion
. It experienced a steady rise until it reached a peak at exactly 90
billion
, and remain stable from 1998 to 1999.
However
, it dropped by nearly 20
billion
to the same point as it began.
On the other hand
,
in
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the beginning of the trend, national and international
fixed
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line
users
was
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higher compared to mobiles, with just below 40
billion
and 5
billion
each. They climbed up gradually,
while
the biggest gap for
mobiles
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conversations
were
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in 2000, which has a twofold rise. From
this
point onwards those types kept rising until national and international fixed
line
conversation arrive at 60
billion
, and
mobiles
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conversation with 45
billion
minutes
coversations
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conversations
conversation
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, line with synonyms.
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