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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Other believe it is more important to give all theri time and attention to study for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#university #students #subjects #addition #theri #time #attention #study #qualification
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Some students nowadays show interest in studying different
subjects
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 alongside their own major. As
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 controversial issue, there is
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doubt about it.
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prsonally
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personally
 believe
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this
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 can be beneficial for some
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, the approach is uncalled-for in some cases. Those who argue about learning various
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 usually argue that
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students
 are required to stay away from distractive factors,
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thero
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their
 full attention to
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their
 own major to achieve
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 level of proficiency.
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, physicians who deal with bacteria,
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disease
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 and nutrition facts are better stay away
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subjects
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 as art during their course time and there is no causal relationship between these
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 to follow simultaneously.
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, learning other skills can be beneficial, compelling and sometimes necessary for some
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fields
. To clarify, marketing, art or tourism are
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 susceptible to
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 merged into other fields. In
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this
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 brings an enormous opportunity to university students as they are more likely to become versatile workers in the future.
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 will
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 help them to
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broaden
 their horizons and deal with difficulties
also
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 come up with unique ideas.
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 a tourism expert who knows two languages or marketing techniques
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 will be more likely to convince job recruiters.
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,
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 gaining
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 in some extra fields of studying is useful, in others is considered to be
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a waste
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 of
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time.
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