The chart below shows the results of a recent survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a recent survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives information about reasons for poor
school
attendance in the United Kingdom conducted by a recent survey.
Overall
, there are 5 main causes of bad attendance and the main one is
due to
the fact that both parents work. The highest part of the pie is dedicated to families where both parents work with 40%.
Also
, the second cause is a lack of
school
discipline. It takes forth part of the whole capacity of the pie chart with 25 per cent.
Furthermore
, peer group pressure and bullying are the reasons that share the same numbers. Both of them have 15 per cent, thereby they are in third place in the statistic. The rest of the percentage goes for upbringing problems and it takes only 5%. In conclusion, there are different problems that influence badly on
school
attendance in the UK and the main reasons are parent`s dedication to work and not enough discipline of students in
school
.
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