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There have been many inventions in human history, such as wheels. Some people think the most important thing is the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 argue that the
internet
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 is the most significant
invention
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 throughout the
history
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 of human beings.
However
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, I strongly believe that it is a very important
invention
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 but it is not the greatest as other
inventions
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. When it comes to the
internet
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,it is very useful and a lot of
people
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 use it all over the world. After the
internet
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 was invented,
people
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's lives many changed more
convenient
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 and made
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apply
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many jobs for
about
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industry.
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, in the past, when
people
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 wanted to search for
information
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, they went to the library or bookstore and
then
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 found
information
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 in several books. But, nowadays, they
serach
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search
 for
information
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 on the desk by computer.
Although
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 it is very simple, the number of
information
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 is very varied and very large.
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, if the computer was not
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invention
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, the
internet
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 was not invented.
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, computers were not invented
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that
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which
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 is why they do not have electricity
invention
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. And, smartphones, metaverse, blockchain, ar, etc have
invened
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invented
invested
 in recent days.
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, they are impossible to develop that
do
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does
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 not have the
internet
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. Like
this
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, the
inventions
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' ranking
are
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 difficult to decide. They are all
inventions
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 of
inovation
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innovation
 and essential in human
history
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. Probably, the most important
inventions
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 have continued to
chang
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change
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 the
sociaty
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society
inviornment
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environment
. In the hunting very important age, weapon
inventions
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 were very important , and
at
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in
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 the moving very important age
are
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wheels were very important
inventions
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. For the reason mentioned above, I would disagree with my opinion because human
history
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 had important
inventions
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 always at the other age and
other
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in other
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sociaty inviornment
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social environments
.
Therefore
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, the
internet
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 is a very important
invention
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, but wheels, lights, computers,electricity etc are very important
inventions
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 too. Throughout human
history
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, important
inventions
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 have always emerged in different ages and societal environments

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • instantaneous
  • global communication
  • transform industries
  • democratized access
  • geographic and economic barriers
  • social connectivity
  • global communities
  • cultural exchange
  • telemedicine
  • foundational frameworks
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