The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line chart elucidates the
percentage
of
total
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population
living in the cities in four different countries in Asia between 1970 and 2020 and
also
the predictions for 10 to 20 years later in 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
population
among four Asian countries witnessed an increase with expectations showing that it will incline dramatically. The
population
in Malaysia is predicted to be the highest in 2040
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those four countries,
whereas
the lowest
percentage
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in 2040 will be positioned by Thailand. In 1970, the
population
in Malaysia stood at 30% and doubled over the next 30 years to level off at 40%. Since
then
, it has experienced a considerable increase and is expected to reach 80% in 2030 and 85% in 2040. Moving to Indonesia, the
population
began at only 14% in the initial year but it went up to 50% in 2020. It is estimated that the proportion of
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will rise considerably to 60% in 2040. The figure for
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in
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started at well above 30% in 1970
then
rose to 75% during the following 50 years.
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in the Philippines is expected to experience an uplift in 2030 and 2040 until it reaches a peak at 55%. Meanwhile, the
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in Thailand in 1970 was around 19% and increased to 30% in 1990.
However
, it remained constant until 2020. It is expected that the
percentage
of
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will soar to 45%
at the end
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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