The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below

#participation #leisure #activities #children #australia #report #information

The provided bar graph illustrates information about the change in children who are between 5 and 14 years old and live in Australia selected

activities

for

leisure

in their free time, with data presented on a percentage scale.

Overall

, almost all children selected watching TV/videos.

However

, only about three in ten children selected

skaeteboarding

Correct your spelling

skateboarding

/rollerblading. In detail, electric and computer games were selected by nine

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ten

boys

. The

figure

2nd

Correct article usage

the 2nd

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highest of all

leisure

activities

Also

, the

boys

selected bike riding and

skeateboarding

Correct your spelling

skateboarding

/rollerblading , about 70% and 40%

repectively

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respectively

. And, the

leisure

activities

were the lowest choice among

boys

was art and craft. The

figure

was only around 30

percent

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per cent

show examples

. When it comes to girls' patterns, they too the best like to spend their free time

for

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apply

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watching TV/videos. And, bike riding , electric/computer games and art /

craft

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crafts

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that

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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had almost the same

figure

at around 60%. Among them, bike riding and electric/computer games

figure

lower than

boys'

Correct your spelling

boys figure

figure

. But, art and craft

leisure

activities

are more interesting than

boys

. And, the worst interesting

leisure

activities

was

Correct subject-verb agreement

were

show examples

skeateboarding

Correct your spelling

skateboarding

and rollerblading, with a

figure

aroud

Correct your spelling

around

20%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, leisure, boys, figure with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

186 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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