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Music play an important role in society, others think it is simply a form of entertainment for individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is people started are divided on
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perception
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music
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music
. It is undeniable that listening to
music
 has become an essential part of our life.
However
, there is no absolute agreement on whether it should be counted as
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 role in our social life or it is just for fun and
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. A commonly held belief is that
music
 help with expressing feeling and
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 from being in a blue. As evidence of
this
 they point to a huge range of artists
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their experiences and inner emotions to which listeners can relate.
Furthermore
, there are plenty of situations when listeners
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 in darker times, and they were able to pass those days
due to
 the
music
 that described a moment close to theirs. It could be explained by the fact that every song
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 that everything is going to be
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 in the end.
As a
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 it leads to the fact that
music
 is not just about having, but
also
 it has healing properties.
On the other hand
, some people claim that
music
 does not have
such
 deep meanings and it is just for entertainment.
For instance
, they may mention that they
also
 can get positive emotions but
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 other
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.
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 as
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 dancing and karaoke singing. The explanation lies in the fact that they express their emotions without
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 deeper into the meaning of the lyrics.
Therefore
, there group of individuals
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 receive a dopamine rush and enjoy their time
while
 listening to
music
. In
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 taking everything mentioned into
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 I would argue that
music
 is created for all citizens and everyone has their own rights on how to perceive the idea of
music
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural tool
  • shared identity
  • cognitive development
  • creativity
  • mental health
  • music therapy
  • chronic pain
  • entertainment value
  • personal escape
  • cultural background
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