Music play an important role in society, others think it is simply a form of entertainment for individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is people started are divided on
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
perception
on
Change preposition
of
show examples
a
Remove the article
music
a piece of music
show examples
music
Use synonyms
. It is undeniable that listening to
music
Use synonyms
has become an essential part of our life.
However
Linking Words
, there is no absolute agreement on whether it should be counted as
vital
Add an article
a vital
show examples
role in our social life or it is just for fun and
relax
Replace the word
relaxation
show examples
. A commonly held belief is that
music
Use synonyms
help with expressing feeling and
heal
Wrong verb form
healing
show examples
from being in a blue. As evidence of
this
Linking Words
they point to a huge range of artists
share
Correct pronoun usage
who share
show examples
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
their experiences and inner emotions to which listeners can relate.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, there are plenty of situations when listeners
stuck
Add a missing verb
were stuck
show examples
in darker times, and they were able to pass those days
due to
Linking Words
the
music
Use synonyms
that described a moment close to theirs. It could be explained by the fact that every song
mention
Change the verb form
mentions
show examples
that everything is going to be
alright
Replace the word
all right
show examples
in the end.
As a
Linking Words
result
Add a comma
,result
show examples
it leads to the fact that
music
Use synonyms
is not just about having, but
also
Linking Words
it has healing properties.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, some people claim that
music
Use synonyms
does not have
such
Linking Words
deep meanings and it is just for entertainment.
For instance
Linking Words
, they may mention that they
also
Linking Words
can get positive emotions but
by
Change preposition
in
show examples
other
way
Fix the agreement mistake
ways
show examples
.
Such
Linking Words
as
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
dancing and karaoke singing. The explanation lies in the fact that they express their emotions without
go
Change the verb form
going
show examples
deeper into the meaning of the lyrics.
Therefore
Linking Words
, there group of individuals
which
Correct pronoun usage
who
show examples
receive a dopamine rush and enjoy their time
while
Linking Words
listening to
music
Use synonyms
. In
conclusion
Add a comma
,conclusion
show examples
taking everything mentioned into
account
Add a comma
,account
show examples
I would argue that
music
Use synonyms
is created for all citizens and everyone has their own rights on how to perceive the idea of
music
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by dnm.best on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural tool
  • shared identity
  • cognitive development
  • creativity
  • mental health
  • music therapy
  • chronic pain
  • entertainment value
  • personal escape
  • cultural background
What to do next:
Look at other essays: