The key to solving the environmental problems is for the present generation to sacrifice their convenient lifestyle for the sake of future generations. Agree/disagree?

Given two graphs concerning the average monthly
temperature
and annual
sunshine
issue.
While
the former graph reveals the average
temperature
per month, measured in degrees Celsius, the latter
indicate
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the
hours
of
sunshine
per
year
, counted in
hours
, in three various cities namely
London
, New
York
and
Sydney
.
Overall
, the temperatures of
London
and New
York
experience
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a progressive fluctuation, the reverse was true for those in
Sydney
. Meanwhile, the duration of
sunshine
in New
York
is longer than the others’ data. It is evident to see that the
temperature
at the beginning of the
year
is quite the same as that
at the end
of the
year
and July is the most special month in the
year
. In terms of the
temperature
of
three
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the three
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cities,
although
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the temperatures
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temperatures
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temperature
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of
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in
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Sydney
is
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are
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hottest at approximately 27 at the beginning of the
year
, it declines consistently dramatically by exactly 10 in July which is
trough
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the trough
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coldest in
this
country. After that, the
temperature
of
Sydney
bounced back gradually and relentlessly to over 25
at the end
of the
year
. Despite the same trends, the temperatures in
London
and New
York
witness different levels of growth.
While
the former starts at nearly 10 and increases significantly and continuously to reach its peak at 25 in July before going down sharply and constantly to in the vicinity of an initial point, the latter experience
similar
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a similar
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growth pattern with starting point, peak, ending point with 5, 30 and 5 respectively. despite being the coldest country in January with 5, becoming the hottest country with exactly 30. To be specific, the
temperature
in the first six months
hike
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hiked
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6-fold compared to that in January before the
temperature
went back to its first place in December. Regarding the hour
sunshine
, the sun in New
York
shines the longest time period with 2535
hours
, followed by that in
Sydney
with 2473. Meanwhile, in
London
,
hours
of
sunshine
take up the least significant time with over 1000
hours
.
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