With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered area of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extend do you agree?

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From the starting point of human history, people

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needed

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for their lives. In our modern world, the population getting larger day by day, and because of

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, the global industry's

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demand rate climbing sharply and companies

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and

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the idea which looking for new fossil fuel

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in new potential areas.

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there are some strong reasons, I completely disagree with

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opinion in some ways.

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essay will point out the reasons why I am staying on the opposite side the discovering new hydrocarbon

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, they are completely harmful to our environment. Especially cars whose engines use oil that produces CO2 every day. Our air was quality incredibly unhealthy. Because of the air conditions, our plants are

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poisoned and we need to eat them. We need to eat poison. There is a circle which starts the

resources

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area to our table, full of harmful chemicals.

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, virgin areas have some special flora and fauna. When the companies try to find new

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sources,

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they destroy

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unique region. Rare animals and endemic plants will die because of the making of more cosmetics and Mcdonalds'. It is not fair. We can stay alive without any cosmetic product but animals can not survive without water, trees and soil. We need to respect their homes,

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life rights.

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, If we really need more

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, we can use sustainable

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as sun, wind, water and

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Although

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they are not 100 % environmentally friendly,

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hydrocarbon

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, they are obviously less harmful. In conclusion, there are some parts of the world that

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not open to searching for new oil and gas supplies.

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many think that those areas should be open for searching, I completely disagree with that thought because of same reasons which I had already explained.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

307 words

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