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The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table and pie charts show the data of
police
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fund
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funds
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 in the years 2017 and 2018. The table provides information about how the
police
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money
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 came from different sources including national government, local taxes and other sources in 2017 and 2018.
While
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 the pie charts compare the percentage of spending
money
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 that was divided into 3 parts for
police
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 between 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, the most
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police’s
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police
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 income was from the national government.
In contrast
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, the least
police
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 budget was collected from other resources
such
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 as rewards.
However
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, the majority of the expenditure was used for
police
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 officer’s salaries
whereas
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 technology was the least concern for both years. It is evident that most of
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money
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the money
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 obtains from
national
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the national
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 government in
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the year
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year
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years
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 2017 and 2018 stood at 175.5 million and 177.8 million respectively.
On the other hand
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, approximately 38 million was
gain
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 from other things. In 2017 and 2018, more than half of
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money
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the money
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 was separated
to
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into
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staff’s
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staff
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 salaries
accounted
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 for 75% and 69% respectively. But the part of buildings and transportation stayed the same at 17%. Even though, the least amount of
money
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 was given to technology in both years. There was a 6% increase
of
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in
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technological
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the technological
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 section in the year 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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