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some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them.other people belive it is good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are individuals who prefer to have a friendship with people with common ideas. On the other side, there is a contrary opinion that it's better to have mates whose points of view differ from your own. In
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 essay, I am planning to consider both of these statements and clarify my own opinion. Obviously, it depends on a person's character traits, and everyone is free to choose by themselves who communicate with and how.
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if a person has a calm and peaceful mood, he would choose a friend whom he has a lot in common with. As far as I am concerned, it's preferable to have
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 with similar ideas, and I
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 more confident when my friend doesn't argue with me about every small staff.
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, it takes a huge energy from me to approve my point of view every single time.
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, I used to have
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 a kind of friend when I was a student and it wasn't easy for me. She was my roommate and we were completely different persons, and despite a few years of being
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 at the university, we moved apart after graduation. Afterwards, we
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 emails to each other but as time passed it became far
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between our letters and
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, we stopped communicating at all.
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, there are people who like to dispute and they think that life isn't interesting without controversy. Anyway, maybe it's keep them in tonus but it's definitely not about me.
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, I start
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 tired in
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 an atmosphere that's why I call them vampires as, in my opinion, they waste my inner energy, and I try to avoid their company. In conclusion, I just want to restate that it's better to have
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 with common ideas as life is more peaceful with there is harmony and understanding between
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main idea and uses appropriate transitions to connect ideas.
task achievement
Fully address both views in the prompt and provide a clear stance in the introduction and conclusion.
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